That was... Odd...
And the random chord that plays every so often during the chorus is just... completely off... One thing to consider when making a song is what key it's played it... For example, the chord you played is not in the same key as the rest of the song, making it sound completely out of place... ( Sounds like a C Chord lol )
Also... the instruments just don't make sense... The lead sounds exactly like the bass just at a higher pitch, and there is a definite lack of percussion.
And my last complaint is that this sounds like it's a simple Midi - MP3 piece, meaning you did almost nothing to "make the song your own."
There's a lot of work needed before this song is good... But it's still not even close to the worst I've heard lol :)
Keep up the work, Voted 3/5 / 5/10:
~DJ-HappyFace :)